Now, for example, in this reply. Should I have put my actions in third person past tense also? i.e. ( Joris then threw the rifle at the pilot and grabbed the hand which was holding the blaster.)? Of course no ammo. Why would Imperials keep loaded weapons lying around? They are smarter than that. &q...

"What do you think you're doing with those, eh?" I ask the pilot. "No one is taking me anywhere!" My hand wraps around the barrel of one of the blast rifles in the rack against the wall, and with all of my strenght I swing it across the closest pilot's face. Then bring it to my h...

Thank you for your review, I have tried to remember to correct my tenses. I am, in fact, going to add some or most of this to my biography down the road, if you don't mind. I feel that this training is also the life training of Joris Howers character also. This story is finished with a 'cliff hange...

Joris smirked at the comments. He doesn't think Thyferra's a complete hell hole but he had the same feelings as Skritt. It was time to leave before the Imperials start another oppressive saga. Not to be rude Joris nodded his head in agreement and took a sip of his drink. The alcohol felt good flowin...

This is the work for the first assignment. It may give a little information of what is to come of my biography. I've never written an RP story so I'm not sure how this was supposed to come out. I also tried to stay away from controlling the other PC. The cantinas are usually not as crowded during t...

Thank you for you review. I will continue to write more and start on my assignment. Later that night, while Joris was laying in bed, he heard something outside his window, again. Thinking it was just the wind he paid little attention. He would assume the attackers would return for a second night. T...

Thank you very much. Yes, English my first language, then it's French. I'll try fixing the comma thing. I used to not use enough. Irony maybe, eh. Well, here's a little more of the biography. At night he would lay outside watching the dark night errupt into a fierce light show of green and red stre...

Good Morning, I hope you don't mind, but I only posted part of my biography because I did not want to overload you. I will send more once this has been reviewed. He was raised always thinking he could do good in this galaxy with his interest in medicine and science, but not at home. His 'good' thou...

Good Morning,

Joris Howers respectfully requests to attend the RP training course.

Very Respectfully,

Joris Howers